I See Hope In Your Work
I hate to bear bad news or be veiwed as a hateful critic but I must say this did need much in improvement. Both in the motion sequence, as it needed more smooth flowing visual. Also in the artistic aspect, it seemed to have been poorly made artisticly, possibly not your fault. Yet still the inclusion of even real life images would have added some contrast or at least some varience in your artistic premise.
Also in theme I feel it was underdeveloped, I know you were going for a funny feel, yet being utterly completely random gives no signifigence, especilly when you don't know whats going on. This could be fix by even very simple methods such as having paused moments where you iniate words to come up on the screen describing something they say or do, much like a soliliquy.
It did show hard work, but sometimes hard work is not whats nescicary to achive a great review by the people. I remeber back once to an art contest that I had done some peices for and this one kid had done some spectaculer portrait drawing, had spent hours working into every detail and I knew the work and anguish that he put into that one glorious peice. When another student did a portrait drawing, it was poorly done, face was off, eyes were construed, yet they added a slight hint of red to the lips with a coloring pencil.
Who won you might ask, of course the obviouse answear is the one who added the color, now i don't mean to meander on about a whole bunch of useless nonsense you'll never read anyway but, it seems to me that to be more constructive with your artwork you need to work on the aspects that need it rather than to just work. It's the equivelint of digging a hole in the wrong area, you might be digging, but as long as your doing it feet away it means nothing.
I hope my answear has helped you see some faults that you might not have noticed before. Allthough it might just be a five keep in mind that is never has be that, you are the sculpter so do with the clay what you wish, sometimes that lightest of splatter on a canvas can evoke such emotion, with such simple a movement than you can do if you put that small but if momentum to the paint, remeber do not be downhearted but rather rejoyce at the fact that you can become better, that you unlike the mojority of the population who spends their time doing other things, you can focus your soul, your heart, and your mind on this one thing and make it shine. Whether it is comedy, romance, drama, or just plain is, express it and don't ever let a physicle, emotional, or spiritual boundry ever hold you back because remeber one thing if it's the only thing you remeber:
You set the boundry's, both physicly, and mentally. So there is no reson why you can't break them, and rise above for is it not the words of some great person in history who said that "Man is not made of flesh and bone, but of every thought and that he uses to sculpt it"